Feedback and Reflection

The final stage of this assessment was to provide written feedback for two of our peers. Below are the two feedback rubrics I received on my blog.

(Can, n.d.)

(Can, n.d.)

 

Peer Marking 1: Blog

Name of Blog: Teaching in a Digital World

Name of marker: Amy Mcleay

 

Evidence of minimal/incomplete awareness and engagement

Grade: F

Some evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: P

Sound evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: C

Consistent, comprehensive and wide-ranging evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: D

Exemplary awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions, which is generally well above expectations

Grade: HD

 

Content
Content and ideas:

Blog entries; teaching episode; written response to peer feedback; creativity and design

Provides an unclear and incoherent response to the tasks. Some content may be missing.

 

Response to the tasks is generally clear, although it may lack focus in some.

 

Provides a mostly clear and thoughtful response to the question, although it may lack focus in some tasks.

 

Provides a clear, thoughtful and mostly focused response to the tasks.

 

Provides a coherent, focused and thoughtful response to all tasks.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

22/30

Presentation
Organisation and coherence Lacks overall organisation, thematic unity and coherence in and/or between sentences. May lack overall organisation, but develops ideas coherently. Sentences may be limited in type or inappropriately connected. An overall logic and coherence, and a range of sentence types which are usually appropriately connected. Logically organised, ideas coherent and a range of appropriately connected sentence types. Logically organised, unity of theme and ideas coherent through a range of appropriately connected sentence types.  

 

 

 

 

6.5/10

Grammar and accuracy (including spelling and punctuation) Many grammatical errors and/or use of a limited vocabulary, which may include inappropriate usage. Numerous spelling and/or punctuation errors. Some grammatical errors and/or use of a limited vocabulary which may include inappropriate usage. Several spelling and/or punctuation errors. Some grammatical errors in complex forms, and/or may include a more limited vocabulary range. A number of spelling and/or punctuation errors. A range of contextually appropriate vocabulary and few, if any, grammatical errors. Very few spelling or punctuation errors. A wide range of contextually appropriate vocabulary and no grammatical errors. No spelling or punctuation errors.  

 

 

 

 

 

8/10

Comments:

 

Thank-you for sharing your Blog. I found your content showed a comprehensive understanding of all content. Visually your blog is creative, engaging and well organised.

I particularly liked your layout for the Pinterest site in week 5. It was easy to read and informative.

 

I have three suggestions for improvement.

*Review your blog for any redundant words used in sentences. For example in your ‘Lesson Plan’ blog there is a sentence “..IPads offer endless other opportunities..” try removing ‘other’ for a more concise academic sentence.

*When finishing a paragraph avoid using another’s ideas to conclude. For example in the Digital Divide blog your last sentence “…interact and report on what’s happening in their society (Ushahidi, 2008). Experiment with adding a concluding thought in your own words.

*Lastly my research on reflective writing provided me with a format of three distinct sections. A Description (What happened etc.) A Interpretation (What was the most important/interesting thing learn/discovered and Outcome (What was learnt? What does it mean for my future?). I would suggest that you look at the outcome/conclusion in each blog. In your Scratch week you conclude nicely by writing “Moving forward the challenge…”

I cannot fault any other areas with ease, your spelling and writing style are enjoyable and your visual additives are appropriate. If you would like my PDF on Reflective writing let me know but I am sure you have your own resources.

Total:       36.5 /50

 

Peer Marking 2: Blog 

Name of Blog: Jasmine Housden

Teaching in a Digital World

Name of marker:­­­­­­­­ Tarryn Scott

 

Evidence of minimal/incomplete awareness and engagement

Grade: F

Some evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: P

Sound evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: C

Consistent, comprehensive and wide-ranging evidence of awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions

Grade: D

Exemplary awareness, understanding and engagement with concepts, skills, and dispositions, which is generally well above expectations

Grade: HD

 

Content
Content and ideas:

Blog entries; teaching episode; written response to peer feedback; creativity and design

Provides an unclear and incoherent response to the tasks. Some content may be missing.

 

Response to the tasks is generally clear, although it may lack focus in some.

 

Provides a mostly clear and thoughtful response to the question, although it may lack focus in some tasks.

 

Provides a clear, thoughtful and mostly focused response to the tasks.

 

Provides a coherent, focused and thoughtful response to all tasks.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

25   /30

Presentation
Organisation and coherence Lacks overall organisation, thematic unity and coherence in and/or between sentences. May lack overall organisation, but develops ideas coherently. Sentences may be limited in type or inappropriately connected. An overall logic and coherence, and a range of sentence types which are usually appropriately connected. Logically organised, ideas coherent and a range of appropriately connected sentence types. Logically organised, unity of theme and ideas coherent through a range of appropriately connected sentence types.  

 

 

 

 

8/10

Grammar and accuracy (including spelling and punctuation) Many grammatical errors and/or use of a limited vocabulary, which may include inappropriate usage. Numerous spelling and/or punctuation errors. Some grammatical errors and/or use of a limited vocabulary which may include inappropriate usage. Several spelling and/or punctuation errors. Some grammatical errors in complex forms, and/or may include a more limited vocabulary range. A number of spelling and/or punctuation errors. A range of contextually appropriate vocabulary and few, if any, grammatical errors. Very few spelling or punctuation errors. A wide range of contextually appropriate vocabulary and no grammatical errors. No spelling or punctuation errors.  

 

 

 

 

 

7/10

Comments:

Jasmine your blog is very comprehensive and well referenced. You have used a wide range of resources to support your blog. The pages appeared very busy at times with my eyes wandering to the images whilst trying to read the text in some instances. Other than that great job

Total:     40/50

 

(Kakisy, n.d.)

(Kakisy, n.d.)

The feedback I received from Amy and Tarryn was both positive and constructive. The consensus from both peers outlined my photos inhibited some of my blogs. I agreed with this feedback, and spent considerable time editing my blogs to present my pictures, text and additional media in a more aesthetically pleasing manner.  I am pleased with the result.

Amy spent considerable time reviewing my blog, and suggested when I am editing I should remove redundant words to create concise academic sentences. Furthermore, she highlighted that I had concluded one Blog with a paraphrase instead of using my own words, and provided a format for creating reflective blogs. I appreciate the additional time Amy spent reviewing my blog. This feedback scaffolded my editing, and enabled me to see my blog through the eyes of another reader and pick up on undetected grammatical errors. The experience was invaluable and I have made considerable changes to my blog that accommodate the feedback suggestions.

 

References

 
Can, A. J. (n.d.). Peer review. [Cartoon]. Retrieved from

http://www.flickr.com/photos/ajc1/6735929719/in/faves-95123867@N07/

 

Kakisky. (n.d.). Peer review. Retrieved from

 

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